English

THE OLD ELEPHANT AND THE GIANT WORM

MORAL: CHEATERS NEVER WIN

I CAN WRITE A FABLE AND USE LOTS OF MORALS

 

 

 

Dinosaurs

It was a wonderful day and I was reading a book about dinosaurs. Half way through the book my favourite dinosaur a T.rex jumped right out of the book and quickly ran pass me .He was very strong and fast. There was no way that I could stop him. I wondered how will I get him back into the book. The T.rex continued to run. He ran straight for the city. He was quicker than a car going it’s full speed. There was no stopping him. I jumped into a very fast car but he just ZOOMED right pass me. As the T.rex headed towards the city he damaged cars, houses and even people had to run for there life. When T.rex reached the city the police and the FBI were there to try and stop him from destroying the city. When I reached the city I began to hear gun shots and this made me very upset, as all I wanted to do was to return him back into the story book were he will be safe.

           

THE DAY I SAW THE EASTER BUNNY WITH MY OWN EYES

 

One very cold night my family and I were all sleeping pass midnight. Then i heard a very loud noise in the kitchen.

So I got out of bed and got the flashlight that I got for Christmas and it was a good won to.then i slowly walked down the corridor.

After i slowly approached the kitchen then i turned to the left and I saw the EASTER BUNNY i was so surprised.

After that I saw him/her putting chocolate Easter eggs in the fridge Just after that he finished putting chocolate eggs in the fridge then i said why did you put chocolate eggs in the fridge.

Then he smacked me across the face then he/her also was putting chocolate eggs in our back yard but those eggs where smaller then the eggs that he put in the fridge.

After that he was almost done putting the chocolate Easter eggs in our backyard when he was done.

Then he/her jumped over the fence then started putting chocolate eggs in our neighbours house then he work up everyone in there house

After that he was almost finished putting the chocolate eggs in our back yard and when he stopped.

Then I thought why would the Easter bunny be real. I think that was a guy in a Easter bunny suit.

After he heard me saying the he was not real then he came back and said i am the real Easter bunny.

Then I said why are you talking then i said ha your not the real
The he said I’m not the real ester bunny.

After that he took his suit of and he was a man. I said why did you fake being the Easter bunny.

Then he said i like eating Easter eggs and giving them out to people all around the world.

The end

My goal is to use much more openers and punctuation

By brendon And thank you for reading my big write

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One thought on “English

  1. Dear Brendon,

    I have enjoyed reading your English page especially the story about Dinosaurs and The Day You Saw the Easter Bunny. You used great adjectives and engaged the reader. I hope you continue your great work.
    From Fiona

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